Some people think that men and women have different qualities. Therefore, some certain jobs are suitable for men and some jobs are suitable for women. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some believe that males and females possess distinctive qualities so

that

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some

jobs

suit

men

better whilst others tailor to

women

. Personally, I completely disagree with

this

view.

This

essay will discuss my viewpoint with detailed reasons and relevant examples. First of all, no

intelligence

is proven to be gender specific. In the past,

men

were found to be outnumbering

women

in certain fields, notably the STEM (science, technology, engineering and math) subjects. one that suggests

men

are more suitable for performing STEM-related

jobs

than

women

due to

the stereotypical thinking about the disparity in certain types of

intelligence

such

as logical-mathematical

intelligence

. But over time,

women

have demonstrated their intellectual capability and strength in the aforementioned fields,

such

as Madame Curie, Annie Easley, Zhenyi Wang, and Youyou Tu. It can be inferred that

intelligence

is a gender-natural concept

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and that

men

and

women

can do equally well in the seemingly manly fields.

Secondly

, with the development of machines,

men

's advantages in physical strength will gradually disappear, which means that heavy physical work

that is

only suitable for

men

will gradually disappear.

For example

, miners, construction workers, farmers, etc. These

jobs

will be replaced by machines and robots in the near future.

Therefore

jobs

that are only suitable for

men

will gradually decrease and be replaced by

jobs

that are suitable for both genders,

such

as computer programmers.

Thirdly

men

can work as patiently as

women

. It is a common stereotype that most

men

are more irritated than

women

Therefore

men

are not suitable for

jobs

that require

patience

such

as nurses. In fact, lack of

patience

is not caused by

men

’s innate qualities. It is found to be closely related to early childhood education and family influence. Most parents do not treat boys with the same tenderness as girls when they educate their children.

As a consequence

, from a very young age, they seem to become more irritable than

women

. With the improvement of educational concepts,

this

situation has changed.

According to

statistics, the number of male nurses has risen steadily since 1970.

This

proves that

men

are capable of

jobs

that require

patience

. Given that

intelligence

is a gender-neutral concept,

jobs

that require physical strength will be gradually replaced by machines, and more

men

have taken occupations that require a high level of

patience

, it can be concluded that

men

and

women

are equally capable of performing any

jobs

Hence

, fixating on the belief that gender determines the suitability of occupations does not seem to be appropriate.

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Your response provides a comprehensive and well-structured analysis of the topic. You effectively refute the argument and provide clear reasons and examples to support your viewpoint.

coherence cohesion

Your essay displays excellent coherence and cohesion. The logical flow of ideas is well-maintained, and the use of linking words and cohesive devices enhances the overall coherence of the essay.

Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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11Linking words
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5Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Grammar mistakes
 

5 paragraphs

419 words

6.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

gender roles
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social dynamics
merit-based selection
advancements in technology
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