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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Poor nutrition and obesity is a problem in many developed countries and some people believe a tax on fast food would reduce the problem. Do you agree? Write at least 250 words.

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Over the
last
 two or three decades, the eating habits of
people
 all over the world have changed dramatically
due to
 major advances in lifestyles.
As a result
, a growing number of the population are becoming fat and not taking nutritional
food
 in some advanced countries. It is argued by
many
Capitalize word
Many
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 that the problem of obesity can be reduced by imposing a tax on fast
food
items
. I disagree with
this
 point of view because
people
 are responsible for taking care of their
health
 and maintaining good eating habits. To start with, it is well said that
health
 is everything and one should understand its worth. It is totally up to the individuals what to eat or what not because at least adults are aware of the consequences of having healthy and nutritional meals.
For instance
, if a person is obese or malnutritional, he will be advised by a doctor not to eat
such
items
, and if the person is really worried about his well-being, he will obey the instructions doesn't matter how cheap or expensive the unhealthy
food
 is.
Hence
, it is
people
's own choice to maintain
food
 habits, and if they are concerned about their physical and mental
health
, they will sacrifice
otherwise
 not.
Additionally
, a cost on junk
food
items
 cannot be helpful in the decline of their intake because
people
 who are addicted to fast
food
items
 will be ready to pay some extra money for their taste.
In addition
,
people
 prefer eating fast
food
 when they have a busy schedule and do not have time to prepare the
food
. So they avoid their well-being and opt for cheap and easy options.
Therefore
, imposing a tax on
such
food
items
 cannot change the mindset of the public about their own
health
.
To conclude
, I disagree with the point that the issue of obesity and lack of nutrition among
people
 can be tackled by imposing a tax on packaged
food
whereas
 it is their own perspective whether to take care of their
health
 or not.
Also
, lack of time is one of the main reasons behind consuming these
food
items
, so it cannot be solved by taking
this
 action.
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