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Many people prefer to stay in a hotel. What are the benefits and drawbacks of staying in a hotel compared with renting an apartment? What is your view on this? What do you prefer? Give reasons for your answer.

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It is absolutely evident, that the global tourism industry is slowly recovering from the Covid-19 pandemic and over the
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 couple of years people have started travelling again. Having said that, most travellers nowadays are still struggling when it comes to choosing the accommodation they want to stay in, and in
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 essay, we will dissect two of the most popular types: an apartment and a hotel. From one point of view, hotels indeed have a lot of disadvantages in comparison with apartments.
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, they are typically more expensive, kitchenless and can lack basic home appliances.
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, the rooms themselves may look very bland or too sterile, and on many occasions, the pictures on websites do not match the reality.
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, renting apartments usually have a lived-in feel to them, which not only creates a certain aura among the tenants, making them feel cosy, but it makes the place much more affordable.  From another point of view, booking a hotel totally eliminates the possibility of scams and gives a sense of security to potential tourists.
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, in many cases, hotels provide a myriad of services, like airport transfer, breakfast and dinner, room cleaning, beauty kits, and international adapters.
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 the
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 price of booking may be higher than rent, not only does it save a lot of time and effort, but it
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 makes a trip feel like a special occasion. In conclusion, booking a hotel is my preferred option
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 travelling and I firmly believe that it is a much superior option to renting an apartment.
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 I totally understand the necessity to save money on accommodation when travelling, it should not harm the comfort and
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 experience of a potential trip.
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coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and that transitions between ideas are smooth to further enhance cohesion.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a well-defined introduction and conclusion with clear opinions.
task achievement
The response addresses all parts of the task, comparing the benefits and drawbacks of hotels versus apartments effectively.
coherence and cohesion
Uses a good range of cohesive devices to link ideas within and between paragraphs.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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