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Some people think that money is the best gift to give to youngster while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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While
 it may seem trivial, giving gifts can be a tricky thing to do, especially when the receivers and the givers have a significant age gap or if it happens in a society that believes in some myths or associations related to certain objects. Among all the objects that are often used as gifts,
money
 is definitely the most debatable one. Some argue that giving
money
 to younger people, especially kids with no income or unmarried adults, is a wise decision,
while
 others believe that it is considered rude
behavior
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. In
this
 essay, I would like to explain my opinion from both perspectives.
To begin
, the reason
this
 issue arises in the first place is because
money
 is sensitive. It is often seen as a symbol or a tool to measure someone's social status.
Therefore
, people can easily get offended when they receive
money
, even if it is from someone older.
For example
, a privileged kid who usually receives thousands of dollars from his parents as a monthly allowance will most likely feel annoyed when he receives something less than that as a birthday present from other family members.
However
, the association behind giving
money
 is not always negative. When more mature individuals give
money
 to youngsters, it is often regarded as an encouragement to be wiser with
money
.
Furthermore
, it can spark conversation about wisdom related to
money
.
This
 case can be seen when grandparents give
money
 to their grandchildren
while
also
 reminding them to always stay humble, no matter how prestigious their career is.
To sum up
, giving
money
 as a gift can send an ambiguous message, particularly if both the giver and receiver have different perspectives on
money
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Financial literacy
  • Practical gifts
  • Monetary value
  • Intrinsic value
  • Fiscal responsibility
  • Material possession
  • Impersonal gift
  • Emotional attachment
  • Economic independence
  • Consumerism
  • Saving habits
  • Purchasing power
  • Thoughtful present
  • Personal development
  • Financial autonomy
  • Gift-giving culture
  • Budget management
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