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In many developed countries, fast food is cheap and widely available. Many people tend to choose unhealthy option. what can governments do to solve this problem.

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Nowadays eating fast
food
 has become the norm
due to
 the fact that there are more fast
food
 chains these days that offer cheap deals, making it easy for the public to choose to buy unhealthy foods
instead
.
This
 essay will discuss what kinds of solutions governmental authorities could act upon to counteract the growing issue. 
To begin
 with, Governmental authorities could implement a fast
food
 tax.
As a result
, not only would many people would become discouraged causing them to decide against purchasing taxed items but, shopkeepers would think twice about only selling
food
 that has taxed items as they would
also
 need to spend more money to make money, leading them to a healthier choice.
Furthermore
, they should
also
 introduce a cap on how many stores open that only sell unhealthy
food
.
Additionally
, I advise a complete stop or reduction in fast
food
 advertisements, because, seeing a Macdonals ad ,
for example
, puts the idea of consuming unhealthy meals in people's heads.  To continue, It is necessary for governmental authorities to impose an educational curriculum in schools about unhealthy cuisine choices and how they harm the body. Educating
while
 young prevents them from picking up bad habits
as well as
 teaches them about the consequences of those actions. To give an example, in Somalia, schools teach children about healthy and unhealthy diets.
In addition
, they teach them about heart disease and diabetes that result from consuming foods that cause
such
 illnesses
therefore
 that are more people that are healthy compared to unhealthy. The nation now barely has any chains that offer fast
food
 because of rules like
this
 that have been put in place.
To conclude
, I believe that if governments implement these rules, it could save lives in the long run.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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