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Some people say that we do not need printed newspapers anymore. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

#people #newspapers
In a
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 decade ago, newspapers
was
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 the main way of communication.
However
,
this
 has been
dramaticly transmited
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dramatically transmitted
due to
 the new and fast channels people begin to use. I totally agree with the notion that we do not need newspapers
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further
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.
Thus
, the electronic one is another story. The
nesscety
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nicety
 of
the
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printed
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news
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 has been in
declin
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decline
 since the starting point of using the internet. A
diffrent
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different
 path to
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obtain
 more information
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, as well as an easy way to talk with each other or discuss,
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as well as
 an easy way to talk with each other or discuss are already present.
Therefore
, a
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paper
proper
 biased news is no longer that effective. Some people are arguing about the huge
privilage
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privilege
 of reading from an old school. On
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hand
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 the waiting time is
cruial
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crucial
 for the readers in the moment. On the other, the ability to converse about what is going in the same time is not doable.
To sum up
, news
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agencies
 will
definetlly contnue
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definitely continue
 writing but in another fashion to keep up with all the changes
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implemented
 by
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technology.
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