The range and quality of food has been improved with the development of technology and scientific advance. Some people think it is good and others think it is harmful. Discuss two sides and give your opinion.

The innovation in the quantity and
characteristic
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of food items
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done with the latest technology. It has been frequently argued
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this
change is beneficial for
body
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the body
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or not. In
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along with
my
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To begin
with, some people think that scientifically prepared food is good for inhabitants because of the following reasons.
Initially
, it is possible to taste
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variety of eatables, even in the localities that could produce only limited crops.
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, in
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western countries,
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farmers could
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plough their
field
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only for
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of six months,
thus
if people rely on
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natural substances,
then
they could not have a sufficient diet.
Besides
, the nutritional value available in locally produced meals could not meet the requirements of the human body.
Consequently
, they have to rely on synthetic items to remain healthy and physically fit.
On the other hand
, juveniles, who oppose the intake of chemically prepared products
also
justify it. To commence with, these could have a detrimental impact on the body for a
long-term
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, as
inhabitatnts
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inhabitants
might need to suffer from deadly diseases,
For example
, in
this
era, the proportion of patients suffering from diseases
such
diabetes
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as diabetes
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has surged, specifically
due to
intake of synthetic
flavors
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added to make the
cuisins
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cuisine
cuisines
more juicy or delicious.
Furthermore
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businessmen use alternative and cheap
material
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materials
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while
producing, so that they could enhance
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and earn more profit. In conclusion, there is no doubt that the inventions made so far have created diversity in eating substances.
However
, the adverse impact observed on
dwellers
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well-being could not be neglected, as it could even lead to
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of a human life. So I believe, the readymade items should be avoided to eat as much as possible.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Agricultural efficiency
  • Food preservation
  • Nutritional enhancements
  • Genetically modified organisms (GMOs)
  • Processed foods
  • Ecological footprint
  • Biodiversity
  • Pesticides
  • Factory farming
  • Lab-grown meat
  • Sustainability
  • Food distribution
  • Food security
  • Ethical sourcing
  • Monoculture farming
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