task 2 the money spent on space research has brought enormous benefits to mankind, but it could be more usefully applied. how far do you agree?

It has been noticed that even though outer-space studies bring significant advantages to humankind, it is better to be used
elsewhere
. I completely agree with the latter argument, as there are other current problems and important research fields that need the government's attention. One evident reason for space research should be de-prioritized is that the world has more pressing issues that require immediate attention
such
as poverty, education and healthcare.
Furthermore
,
areospace
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aerospace
studies require considerably large funds and advanced equipment.
Hence
such
funds can be more useful on above mentioned global issues.
For example
, if a country could spend that much on the educational system's advancement
instead
, there would be more educated professionals who will eventually be involved in fast economic growth in the long run.
Likewise
, if spent on infrastructure,
then
a better standard of living for the society as a whole.
On the other hand
, most of
such
astronomical projects yield no results.
Furthermore
, they have a tendency to cease after many years of wasted resources, once they reach a dead-end where the probability of
such
is very high.
Hence
such
funds and money can be spent on other research with definite results
such
as in medical, technological and environmental fields.
For instance
, the vaccine for Covid 19 has been one of the greatest inventions in recent history. It can be seen how important they can be
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space findings to humankind. In conclusion, world money can be spent on more important economic and sociological issues and other projects where its advantages are vast and far more beneficial than the positive effect space studies have to offer.
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