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of a Toyota Camry and

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length of time it takes for 1 citizen to purchase that mode of transport in eight Asian countries. Despite having the second lowest average yearly income, it costs more to buy

this

car in Vietnam than in all but one other Asian nation. It

also

takes significantly longer for a standard person to buy an automobile in Vietnam than in any other state in Asia. On the other end of the scale, Singaporeans have to pay nearly three times more for their cars than the Vietnamese and it takes them the least amount of time to afford a motor vehicle. It costs $49,944 to buy a Toyota Camry in Vietnam, but

this

dwarfs the average yearly income per person at just $1,910. It would

therefore

take a normal man or woman 26.1 years to save up for that particular car.

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in contrast

to Singapore where it costs $126,245 for that model of

motorcar

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however

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the average salary is much greater at $55,182.

This

means that it generally takes just over 2 years for a typical individual from Singapore to acquire

this

vehicle.

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the graph below show top ten countries vehicle cost.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

It seems to be an increasing trend towards assessing student through exams rather than assessment. What are the advantages and disadvantages of exams as a form of assessment?

Fewer and fewer people today write by hand using a pen or pencil. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or a negative development?

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