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In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problem as a result of eating to much fast food. It is neccesary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Fast
food
 is very common in almost all countries and its
demand
 is consistently increasing. In some ,nations a large number of
people
 are becoming unfit
due to
 excessive consumption of
junk
food
. I agree that increasing taxes on
this
 category of
food
 will definitely reduce the
demand
, I
also
 think at a certain point
people
 will not stop eating it because they are addicted to it. The prime factor responsible, for society consuming fast
food
 is because it is very cheap and easily available in the market. On average out of 10
people
 8 eat these kinds of
food
 every day and harms their digestive system
as well as
 their heart. Imposing taxes on these kinds of
food
 is a great initiative to stop them from consuming it.
Moreover
, the public will
also
 spend the same money on fruits or healthy
food
, which
as a result
 protects them from chronic diseases.
For instance
, in some cities of ,India the ruling authorities have increased tax rates by 18% on all categories of
junk
food
,
due to
 which
demand
 has significantly reduced.
However
, it is an undeniable fact that addiction to anything is very harmful to each individual, imposing higher taxes will definitely reduce the sale of
junk
food
 but ,still
people
 will eat it because here money is not the concern.
For instance
, society is addicted to alcohol which is very expensive but still thousands of
people
 consume it and they know it will directly harm them still
demand
 is very high ,
similarly
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this
 is the same situation with
junk
food
.
Thus
 the government should permanently ban
this
 category of
food
 in their countries and provide other business opportunities to
junk
food
 sellers,
this
 is the only possible solution to protect
people
. In a nutshell, increasing the price of
junk
food
 will not stop
people
 from eating it, because
people
 are addicted to it.
Therefore
, it is the responsibility of the government to immediately ban it and promote healthy lifestyle campaigns to change the mindset of society.
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