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The internet has made traditional libraries unnecessary. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Discuss giving examples from your own knowledge and experience.

#internet #libraries
Some people think that technology
such
 as the
Internet
 can replace traditional libraries and books for that matter. I strongly agree with
this
 notion.
To begin
 with, the
internet
 has been a necessity especially during the pandemic and up to
this
 day for students. Since students are forced to stay at home, almost every household should have access to the
Internet
 for continued learning. Schoolwork and classes are done online and so no need for face-to-face encounters which can be both beneficial for students and teachers in terms of transportation.
In addition
, fewer books and other printed reading materials mean a more healthy environment because fewer trees are needed to be cut down for paper production. It is a worldwide phenomenon that we have a climate change to address which affects every citizen of the world. It is thereby important to realize as well that by controlling the production of reading materials, we can help in preventing more damage to the environment.
Lastly
, the government can save funds by choosing not to build public libraries.
Instead
, the budget can be allocated to more important sectors like health. We are still in the pandemic era and Covid-19 is still out there unresolved. As a country, we need to help fellow countries in developing treatments and vaccines to eradicate
this
 deadly disease.
Further
 studies are still to be undertaken and we should be doing our share in
this
 endeavour as well. In conclusion, the
internet
 has contributed a lot to the community specifically for education, for the environment and for the government's budget allotment.
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