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The two maps illustrate the external and internal changes in the design of a health centre that happened from 2005 until the present day

The two maps illustrate the external and internal changes in the design of a health centre that happened from 2005 until the present day
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The maps depict information about the inside and outside areas revamped of the health
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center
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 in 2005 and currently. At first glance, the garden and car parking changed in proportion
while
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 the number of consulting rooms increased, and there are new places
such
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 as children's play areas and a minor operations
room
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. As can be seen, in 2005 there was a car parking with 12 capacity spaces in front of the
entrance
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, and a garden surrounding the rest of the external
area
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.
Furthermore
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, in front of the
entrance
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, in the
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center
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, was a reception desk and seats around
this
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area
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.
In addition
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, there were two consulting rooms and a physiotherapy
room
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 on the right
side
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 of the
entrance
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 and another consulting
room
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 and the office on the left. As observed, nowadays, the
entrance
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 changed to the left
side
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 of the place, and the car parking, which has thirty spaces, remains in the same
area
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 and is expanded to the west,
while
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 the garden is on the north and east of the health
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center
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centre
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.
Moreover
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, there is a children's play
area
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 on the right
side
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 of the
entrance
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, a reception desk in front of it, and seats surrounding the
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center
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centre
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. Beyond that, there are three consulting rooms on the south, one on the east, a minor operations
room
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 and a physiotherapy
room
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 on the north, and the office on the west
side
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words center, room, entrance, area, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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