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Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment?

Some individuals find it more comfortable to live in a
house
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,
whereas
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 others suggest that living in an
apartment
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 is better. In
this
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 essay, I am going to provide more advantages in living in a
house
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 than in an
apartment
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. Living in a
house
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 usually means owning the property. Many people prefer living in a
house
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 for several logical reasons.
Firstly
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, living in a
house
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 provides opportunities for various activities
such
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 as playing games in the yard, gardening, or even swimming in a pool (if the
house
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 has one). A person is less likely to get bored.
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, there is no disturbance from
neighbors
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neighbours
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.
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, people do not hear their
neighbors’
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neighbours’
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 conversations because houses are usually separated by space or walls. The main reason is public utilities. If there is a problem with water or light, people can fix it on their own, more quickly and reliably. One advantage of living in an
apartment
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 is the view that a person can enjoy from their window. An individual living in
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apartment
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an apartment
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 is limited to indoor activities.
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, it is easy to hear noise from neighbors and
person
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a person
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 may disturb others if you enjoy listening to loud music or dancing.
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, if there is a problem with public utilities, residents have to wait for it to be solved, and they are not guaranteed the quality of the repair work. In conclusion,
although
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 apartments have certain benefits
such
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 as the view, the
overall
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 advantages of living in a
house
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 like freedom, space, and independence outweigh those of apartments.

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task achievement
Focus on developing each main point with clear examples and details. This helps the reader understand your argument better.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use linking words (like 'firstly', 'moreover') to connect your ideas smoothly. This makes your writing flow better.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure your conclusion clearly summarizes your main points and shows your final opinion. This will make your argument stronger.
task achievement
You have a clear opinion and structure your essay with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
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Your comparison between living in a house and an apartment is relevant and addresses the question asked.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • privacy
  • outdoor activities
  • gardening
  • customization options
  • renovate
  • structural changes
  • investments
  • appreciation/depreciation
  • maintenance costs
  • utility costs
  • security features
  • gated entries
  • surveillance systems
  • shared amenities
  • community centers
  • suburban
  • rural areas
  • commutes
  • urban centers
  • public transport
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