Some people believe that nowadays we have too much choice. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #choice

There is no denying the fact that

people

have a variety of options in all life fields.

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it is a commonly held belief that our

choice

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not limited any more, there is

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an argument that opposes it. In my opinion, I consider that we deal with multi

choice

in occupation chance or even entertainment activities.

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with, spending time for fun recently become a little

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due to

different

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available options, in

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in the past pleasure are determine by want to cinema, restaurants and parks only contrast present,

in addition

people

today have

ability

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to do more different fun activities

such

as play video games, watch youtube or even post in TikTok.

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, if someone

want

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watch

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movie

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he will not only go to

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also

can enjoy watching

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home

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to one of the movie

platform

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that

provide

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movies, documentary and TV show. Another point to consider,

people

today have

work

opportunities in

variety

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places

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, it is

also

possible to say that the main purpose of

work

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money which become easier nowadays and more possible because we live in

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choice

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the social media platform

add

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unlimited

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chance to achieve the purpose you run your own business or

work

distance.

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, a variety

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choice

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that we have let us complete our

work

remotely in covid 19 quarantine. In conclusion, despite

people

having different views, I believe

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much

choice

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our

live

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easier.

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 6.0

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