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The map below shows changes to a park in 1980 and now

The map below shows changes to a park in 1980 and now
The map illustrates the difference
of
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 park layout,in 1980 and now.
Is
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It
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 is clear that the park layout has been changed,with some new
addtional
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additional
service
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services
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 and facilities,and
road
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the road
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 path has been improved. Looking
the
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 map in more detail,the space of
pond
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the pond
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 has been expanded and the location has moved slightly right,which
to add
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 more benches.The space of
original
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 flower that was next to
pond
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the pond
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 has been removed and replaced by
bush
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a bush
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.
Besides
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 that,flowers that
was
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locatted
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located
 on the lower left corner
has
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 been demolished and constructed
a
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apply
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new facilities which was play ground. The space
of
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top
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the top
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 left corner has been expanded,
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however
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 some trees
area
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 has been reduced which is used for
picnic
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a picnic
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area
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 and added chairs,desks and
barbe-cue
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barbecue
bar-be-cue
.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
,
road
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a road
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 path has been added that was
throgh
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through
 between
picnic
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the picnic
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area
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 and
playground
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the playground
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.
Similarly
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,
road
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a road
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 path has been added next to
picnic
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the picnic
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area
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.Two gates that were
locatted
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located
on
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 the western and
southen
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southern
area
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • transformed
  • expanded
  • renovated
  • upgraded
  • revamped
  • refurbished
  • install
  • addition
  • increase
  • enhance
  • improve
  • introduce
  • upgrade
  • create
  • development
  • facilities
  • recreational areas
  • wildlife habitats
  • pathways
  • walkways
  • seating areas
  • lighting arrangements
  • ponds
  • lakes
  • sports facilities
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