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People think that government should increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles to solve environmental problems. Give your opinion.

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it is believed that government should increase the price of
fuel
 for cars and other
vehicles
 to tackle environmental issues. In my opinion, I partly agree with
this
 point and give some reason for
this
. on the one hand, it is undeniable that
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 the consumption of
fuel
 for private
vehicles
 has become increasingly large which leads to a huge number of carbon dioxide emitted into the environment.
This
 makes a direct impact on human health and especially the atmosphere where humans and animals reside.
Therefore
, increasing the cost of
fuel
 can be the one solution to address
this
 environmental problem.
People
 will limit their need in utilizing their personal
vehicles
 that required
fuel
.
Instead
,
people
 have the tendency to commute by public transportation and take advantage of their car to travel to work if the distance is not too far or use a vehicle that consumes renewable or economical energy
such
 as a electric car, or motorbike. In recent years, some corporates have launched some kinds of
vehicles
 that use renewable resources
for example
 electric motorbikes and cars to encourage
people
 to protect the environment.
For example
, in Vietnam, Vinfast have had a line of electric cars and motorbikes that are supported and used on a large scale of Vietnam.
This
 is a good signal for the bright future of zero gas emissions in Vietnam.
On the other hand
, the increase in the price of
fuel
 makes it tough for some
people
 that have low and medium incomes.
This
 can be a burden on their shoulders when they mainly rely on these gasoline
vehicles
 to work and have no choice for another option. When the cost of
fuel
 rise, they are the most vulnerable ones and have barely enough sum of money to pay for it for an extended period.
Therefore
 government
also
 take it into consideration and issue the best resolution for
this
 problem. In conclusion,
while
 increasing the cost is considered to be the way to mitigate the environmental issue,
however
, there are some circumstances that should be affected by
this
 trend.
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