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You eat at your college cafeteria every lunchtime. However, you think it needs some improvements. Write a letter to the college magazine. In your letter, Explain what you like about the cafeteria Say what is wrong with it Suggest how it could be improved

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Dear Mr Ali I am writing
this
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 to inform you,
I
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that I
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am sitting in the college
canteen
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 for lunch on a daily basis with my friends. I
notice
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noticed
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 the college cafeteria should be updated more. I visited the institute cafeteria
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 Friday with my friends for lunchtime. The staff of the
canteen
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 is very polite and
well-responsible
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, they deal with customers with respect and bring orders on time.
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, the quality of the food is so good. I tried almost all sorts of menus at different times, and everything
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 perfect as per their standard.
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, I want to inform you that I observed a few things that need improvement.
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, the cleanliness of the cafeteria was not maintained, they
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 not clean the tables after being used by any customers and I saw food around the tables on the floor. At the time of lunch, the hall of the
canteen
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 is almost full of customers, and
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, they feel very sweaty because the air conditioners do not work properly. In my opinion, you should tell the manager of the
canteen
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 to maintain cleanliness every time.
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, maintenance of air conditioners should be carried out before every summer season, and more air conditioners and fans should be installed. One more thing I want to add here, please increase the menu list. Yours sincerely, Ahsan Islam

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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single main idea to improve clarity and coherence.
Logical structure and Greeting/Closing
Consider introducing the subject of the letter at the beginning and closing the letter with an appropriate sign-off.
Task Achievement
Address all parts of the prompt more thoroughly to create a more complete response.
Suitable Writing Tone
Maintain a professional and formal tone throughout the letter to match the style of a letter to a college magazine.
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