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The chart below shows waste collection by a recycling centre from 2011 to 2015.

The chart below shows waste collection by a recycling centre from 2011 to 2015.
#waste #collection #centre
The line graph illustrates
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the wasted
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wasted
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 collected by
recycling
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the recycling
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center
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 over 4 years , the
amonut
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amount
 of waste was measured by
tons
.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 paper was the highest
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amount
 of material
was
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collected over the given period ,
while
 the garden was the lowest.
Furthermore
, all types of specific
materials
 showed fluctuated during the given period. Looking at the chart
im
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in
 more detail, regarding paper and glass,
the
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in 2011 the
papers
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paper
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 was the highest amount of waste collected at 57
tons
 and after two years it declined to 40
tons
 and after it increased until the end of
given
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 period
at
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 70
tons
.
In contrast
,
the
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glass was the second
materials
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material
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was
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collected in 2011
was
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at 48
tons
 , in 2013 glass was the
higest
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highest
 amount of waste
was
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collected at 48
tons
. In terms of
others
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other
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materials
, the third
forms
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form
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 of
materials
was
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collected was tins in 2011 was at 35
tons
 and after
that
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,that
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 it showed fluctuated and in 2015 was at 38
tons
. In comparison, the
graden
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garden
 was the lowest amount of material
was
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collected in 2011 was 32
tons
 after one year it reached the lowest point at 15
tons
 and after that
graden
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garden
 showed raised in 2015 was 35
tons
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tons, materials with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • recycling centre
  • waste management
  • total waste collected
  • trends
  • categories
  • significant increases/decreases
  • analysis
  • public awareness
  • recycling policies
  • implications
  • future strategies
  • sustainable practices
  • waste reduction
  • data interpretation
  • environmental impact
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