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Buying things on the internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of this type of shopping outweigh the disadvantages?

#internet #books #air #tickets #groceries #type
Nowadays, it
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 become an trend of buying
a
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goods
from
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online which
have
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 made
a
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life easy
as well as
 fast according, to me it has more advantages
then
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 disadvantages. From the viewpoint of
a
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internet
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the world
have
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 become a small market which even supports local shopkeeper. As
a
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people
 are buying from the
internet
this
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there
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time and
a
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money. If a
person
want
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somthing
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something
 from
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another country
then
 they
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 not need to go there and buy that but can order that online and can get it easily.
Firstly
, the main advantage is a
people
 have
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 that
a
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internet
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have
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 made things better compare to
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. Some time community claim A
people
 can buy things online
such
 as books, pens, clothes, tickets, and groceries.
Secondly
, a
person
 can get services
also
 online from another part of a nation.
For example
,if
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want
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 to get
a books
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books
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 and
want
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 to attend a class, it is easy to get that online.
In addition
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internet
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 helps many
people
 to get jobs. If a
person
 will buy good from outside the country
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 it help to grow a relationship between the nation
as well as
also
 benefits for the economy.
Person
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 will travel less than less resources will use limited. In conclusion, from the above
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 it can be said that as
Internet
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have
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 made our life better there are more benefits.
Hence
, purchasing online have,
the
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advantage of
this
 type of shopping have outweighed the disadvantages. As it
have
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 more benefits government should encourage and support that.
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