PART 1: You read an article in a magazine about your hometown and some of the information was wrong. Write to the editor to correct the article and tell him how unhappy you are.

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Dear Mr Smith, I am writing a piece in the magazine about my hometown published in the newspaper
this
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week.
This
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piece has some wrong information and I would like to highlight to you the corrections. I think you would appreciate it and take the matter seriously.
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, the article has really covered most of our hometown's natural resources and historical collections in the museum, but the information related to historical data is inaccurate in the article.
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, on the second ,page it was written as ,1907
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of 1970 and
also
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a similar mistake in the fourth paragraph.
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, I am really surprised and unhappy with the errors in the piece and I hope you would take
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seriously to change it in the next publication. I would
also
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request to ensure the data in the upcoming publications in the future. Looking for getting confirmation from you on
this
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request. Yours faithfully, XXX
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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