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Some people say that parents have more important roles to play in children development.However, others argue that friends and television have the most significant influence. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #parents #roles #children #development #friends #television #influence
Nowadays, kids get to spend a significant part of their time with their peers and watching tv programmes due
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 fact that guardians have to work in order to provide
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 their families.
However
, many argue that
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 need their parents to be more present, to ensure that their development in life is
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more
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adequate
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Firstly
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 believe that there are several
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educational resources in the tv,
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the youngster could take advantage,
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 learn from experts to improve and evolve in knowledge whilst they are enjoying a funny and relaxing
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moment
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 in front of the screen. A recent study from the University of Irvine in
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California
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mayority
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majority
 kids are self
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 by the influence of television and
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electronic
 gadgets.
Secondly
, I strongly believe that
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 there is
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no
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 better influence in life
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 the
parents
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roles models, even though guardians spend plenty of hours outside
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, there
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 still time on the weekends to enjoy in family and influence
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 a positive way in their
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 development, by playing educational games, discovering new hobbies and trying new sports. In resume, I consider that children can take positive advantages by watching tv as well,
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 spending time with their parents,
kids
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 evolution depends
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 various factors.
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