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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #professionals #doctors #engineers #work #country
As the number of
professionals
workking
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working
 abroad increases, it is often discussed whether they should stay where
hey
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they
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 did their
trainings
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training
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 or they should be free to move to another
country
 if they
desired
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 to.
While
 I believe
theat
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that
 a person should be free to migrate, I agree that it has negative effects on the
country
 of training. On the one hand,
professionals
 who decide to work abroad are seeking
for
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a different lifestyle and career opportunities.
Therefore
, they should be allowed to improve their lives outside the limitations of their
country
 of origin.
For example
, whilst in Spain residents in a hospital do not have hands-on experience
due to
 safety measures, in other countries
such
 as Argentina, residents actually practice their skills with patients.
Besides
, cultural exchanges have proven to increase efficiency, since different nationalities mean different
believes
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 and the introduction of new methods.
On the other hand
, when
professionals
 leave the
country
 where they trained, countries are damaged socially and economically. In countries where the government provides free education and healthcare, many people think that the population should compensate the
country
with
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for
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 their skills and abilities.
Furthermore
, as a study
fo
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of
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 South African emigration has pointed out when a professional
lease
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 the
country
 it results in the loss of 10 unskilled jobs.
Therefore
 it
affect
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 the economy and the community. Taking everything into account, it can be said that
miving
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moving
living
 out from the
country
 of training should not be taken lightly, given the adverse effects on the population.
However
, I firmly believe that someone’s professional development should not depend on their
country
 of origin and
professionals
 should be allowed to look for better opportunities overseas.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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