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Many believe that individuals can do little to improve the environment. Only governments and large companies can make a real difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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People
 have had different opinions when it comes to
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 improvement of surroundings.Some
people
 believe that a group of
people
 can do little for the betterment of the habitat whilst others opine that authorities and larger companies can do drastic changes in the improvement of the surrounding.
While
 I understand
people
's concern about environmental factors still i believe that law enforcement agencies can do something bigger
instead
 of smaller communities. There are multiple reasons why
people
 support the fact that societies can improve their surroundings.
Firstly
, they believe waste management is the best way to do something for a better
environment
.
For example
,
although
 most individuals are aware of waste systems,there are some who do not have enough knowledge .
Therefore
 persons from societies can help each other in waste management in effective ways.
Secondly
, individuals have to use paper bags as compared to plastic ones which could be a positive solution for environmental contamination. These points make
people
 believe that
people
 can do something for their
environment
. Despite the arguments mentioned above I still consider the betterment of the
environment
 could be done by the government or bigger investors because of potential reasons .The prime reason behind my views is that government have the power to control rules and regulations so these agencies can impose a fine for every person who makes the
environment
 dirty .
In addition
 to
this
 , higher authorities can make collaborate with bigger companies to produce
environment
-friendly products for daily use
such
 as stopping the production of plastic bags will reduce environmental pollution. Taking into consideration all aspects, I firmly believe that only law enforcement agencies can do something bigger for environmental improvement.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental awareness
  • sustainable practices
  • renewable energy
  • carbon footprint
  • waste reduction
  • conservation
  • ecosystem
  • pollution
  • climate change
  • responsibility
  • leadership
  • legislation
  • investment
  • collaboration
  • systemic change
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