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Some people believe that libraries are waste of resources and computer should replace them . discuss both views and give your opinion.

In today's world, it is mandatory for almost every individual to be technology friendly.
This
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 ever-growing environment has drastically changed the need for references from
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 to computers.In my opinion, being tech-savvy is essential as the internet broadens the scope of resources.
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 with, libraries were the only source of information during the olden times. But
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,
this
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 is not the case in today's modern world where
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 are replaced by electronic devices. Computers provide assistance and reference in just one click and
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 have a humongous amount of data stored.
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 to that, these devices are easily movable and have access to anywhere.
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, when the young generation is given a choice to choose between a
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 or a computer, the results were observed that the majority of them opted for a computer.
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, the
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 has an abundant amount of
books
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, magazines and other data materials.
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, to understand a particular piece of information, a number of
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 and encyclopedias need to be read through and
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 the information can be collected from multiple sections.
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 is definitely
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 process and requires a lot of mental concentration.
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 the
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 in M.J college, only 20% of students opt for study material from the
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while
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 80% of the college-going individuals advocate the use of technological resources for learning. To sum it up, libraries do have their own significance. But in today's
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world
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 everything is just a click away in order to consume time and effort.
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, electronic devices with high-speed internet services save time and cater to the required needs rapidly.

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