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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehical will be passenger. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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21-st
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21st
 century
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 is a century of development technologies. Nowadays,
driverless
 vehicles like
busses
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buses
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,
auromobiles
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automobiles
 and trucks are nothing new to our society.
However
, do they have
more
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 positive effect on our lives or more negative
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? On the one hand, there are lots of advantages. First of all,
driverless
 cars can save
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 time and energy.
For instance
, when we drive a car
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 or other transport we spent our energy to be concentrated on
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 road,
read
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 traffic signs carefully and
drive
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 safely. In
driverless
 transport
meanings
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computer
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 do everything for us, they provide us
comfort
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 and safety.
Also
, in the future
driverless
 vehicles would be
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preferable, because they can't break the driving rules. On
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 hand, there are some disadvantages. When
driverless
auto's
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 will be popular, it will be no need
in
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 personal drivers,
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result
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this
 case will cut some workplaces. To add to
this
, new no-driver transport is uncontrolled. It is nice to be driven by
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, but if a robot in
car
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the car
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 is broken, it will put some risk
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passengers
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passengers'
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 lives and
also
, it will endanger
pedestrians
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pedestrians'
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 health.
Besides
this
, when you drive a car you are able to
controll
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control
 it, when a robot drives, you should trust a computer, for some
people
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 it can be difficult to get used
with
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 it.
To conclude
, there are both pros and cons,
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 there are more disadvantages than advantages. I believe that in
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modern
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 our people are not ready for
driverless
 cars, in the future everything can change.
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