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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Personally, I can imagine how hard the social situation where we have to live in a foreign
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. The biggest problem is when our
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 capabilities to understand and deliver messages are limitless. A simple example I took
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from my experiences
traveling
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 to Singapore. I asked
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 senior janitor about what time the bus shuttle will arrive
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but his English is poor.
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, I misunderstood his information
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I thought '
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 have to wait 10-15 minutes for the next shuttle. In reality, the bus shuttle was available at any time. The problem would increase if you
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 did not know their culture. As an illustration, if
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 thought
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 is a polite way to greet, but the other
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 from another
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 will not think the same way. It is different if we have
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enough understanding of
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 and cultures of the
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. The benefit for us is gaining more friends,
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, and a chance
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 position. I think if we can manage the language barrier by learning it more, everything can go well and in balance.
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conclusion, language and culture is a part of living, so if we want to live in
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 make sure we know how to communicate. We are human beings who need to connect with people and to connect we need communication.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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