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In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasize that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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Currently, many
companies
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 regularly emphasize that their
products
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 or
services
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 are new in some way when they do ads. I think
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 is a negative improvement
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 the fact that the increasing many lies in marketing advertising
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 affects their business and product brand, which I will discuss and present my perspectives in the following essay. First and foremost, several
companies
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 actually have examples or done analyses to replicate or duplicate their
businesses
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 from their competitors or similar organizations or
businesses
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 from overseas, and
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 do adjust to make them more suitable in their country.
As a result
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, they can claim that their
products
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 or
services
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 are new in their country.
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, some Financial Technology and
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 Start-up
companies
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 in Indonesia claimed that they serve new
products
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 and
services
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 to give financial accessibility in villages with maximizing technologies.
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,
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 methodology has been already implemented well and long time in the United States, United Kingdom, or European countries.
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, many public citizens do not directly and easily believe and trust that the
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’ emphasis on their
products
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 or
services
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 is new in some way. People will do research first by looking for information via various channels and platforms,
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 as online resources or word-of-mouth. They will follow and decide based on the recommendations from their relatives or what information they got on the online channels to believe and approve what the business’s advertising emphasizes.
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, many customers users comment on product or service feedback before they believed and trust that the
products
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 or
services
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 in
companies
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 are new in some factors. In conclusion, when
businesses
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 said that their
products
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 are new in some way in their promotions, they should keep in mind that they replicate their
businesses
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 or
products
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 from their competitors or overseas
companies
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, and citizens do not easily and directly believe that.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Innovation
  • Fast-paced
  • Distinguishing
  • Psychological aspect
  • Inherently
  • Perceived
  • Continuous improvement
  • Revolutionary
  • Feasible
  • Throwaway culture
  • Undervalue
  • Longevity
  • Obscure
  • Novelty
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