Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. .

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of
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believe that it is good to adjust to all
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like unfulfilled jobs or low
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. Other
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think the best is to put an effort into developing
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. To form a judicious opinion discussion is essential , where
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stand with the second group . On the one hand of the argument , living
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require
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to work
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and make no choice
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accept their unsatisfied
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.
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have a responsibility toward their families and leaving their profession will aggregate their debts .
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who
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their child
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a private school will undergo
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fate of
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by losing their source of income.
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of the argument, these issues can be solved in many approaches.
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crisis of shortage
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of money
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should not prohibit a person from seeking an
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academic degree
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the government present some financial
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and support their national citizens .
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people
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with high academic degrees and
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a
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practical experience have
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potential of getting a high salary and diverse jobs,
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, success need more patience and insistence and even an individual are
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in
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work , they should be consistent and burden their horizons to approve himself because workplace
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more
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competitive
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study In conclusion , it is undoubtedly that
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harsh
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conditions
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may
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people
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psychological
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. From my perspective ,
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believe encourage individuals to be more active and
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perseverance
to develop
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skill
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and knowledge since desirable results and creativity enhance personal
budget
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budgets
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anormously
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enormously
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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