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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#country #language
I agree with
this
 statement because living in a
country
 where I have to speak
foreign
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language
 needs a lot of preparation, especially for people who find it hard to make friends with others. If you don’t prepare enough, you might get serious social problems. When we move to a
country
 that speaks
foreign
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language
, we need to learn the foreign
language
. Because how can you communicate if you
can’t
 speak the
language
?
Language
 is the first thing you need to prepare before you move to a new
country
. The second thing you need to prepare is your way to adapt. You need to learn how to adapt.
However
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 each person has different ways and different times to adapt. If you are an extroverted person or you love meeting new people, maybe you will adapt and make new friends easily. But, if you are an introverted person and you
can’t
 start a conversation, you will find it hard to adapt
in
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 a new
country
 and you might take a long time to make friends with others. In my opinion, those two things are the most important things when you want to move to a new
country
. If you don’t prepare enough, it can cause serious social problems because you
can’t
 communicate without
language
, and you
can’t
 socialize if you
can’t
 adapt.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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