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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#country #language
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I agree with
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 statement because living in a
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 where I have to speak
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language
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 needs a lot of preparation, especially for people who find it hard to make friends with others. If you don’t prepare enough, you might get serious social problems. When we move to a
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 that speaks
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language
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, we need to learn the foreign
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. Because how can you communicate if you
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 speak the
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?
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 is the first thing you need to prepare before you move to a new
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. The second thing you need to prepare is your way to adapt. You need to learn how to adapt.
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 each person has different ways and different times to adapt. If you are an extroverted person or you love meeting new people, maybe you will adapt and make new friends easily. But, if you are an introverted person and you
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 start a conversation, you will find it hard to adapt
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 and you might take a long time to make friends with others. In my opinion, those two things are the most important things when you want to move to a new
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. If you don’t prepare enough, it can cause serious social problems because you
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 communicate without
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, and you
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 socialize if you
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 adapt.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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