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In the century of technology, cyberspace has a huge influence on
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life.Society shares
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about highway data. Some
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tend to think that all of humanity should get a free allowance to virtual
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,
whereas
others
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criticise
authority and ask to make it possible for citizens who pay for it.From my own perspective, humans that fee for obtaining hypertext documents should get an allowance and it will be discussed in
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essay. It is
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clearly
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that
Internet
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provides
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life with almost everything.
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to extend their acknowledges about
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.It will not be a
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of cake to do duties through reality rather than
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cyberspace.
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of data
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it would be helpful
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for females.
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online shopping or purchase food sources, etc. .That's why, whenever or wherever you are
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Internet
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always will be needed.In
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, some
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ask
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to make it available for everyone.
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, there are several drawbacks
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its'
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availability.If people get that opportunity , it will navigate to numerous issues
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addiction to virtual goods like
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smartphones
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,
laptop
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and etc. . Nations should know about
such
cons and concentrate on
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their
real life or they can destroy their reality and will not be able to do duties
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their ability.
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, the government should make its' price more affordable . Taking all things into account, it is much more advantageous to make it underpriced .In conclusion, I believe that Internet has a good opportunity and humanity should utilize it more
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thoughtfully
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