Some feel that governments should prioritize healthcare instead of other important areas. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The healthcare
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is one of the most crucial
government
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areas
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; its efficiency influences not only the population`s
health
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and
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but
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the region`s rates of liveability and
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satisfactions
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. There are some who believe that investments in the healthcare
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should be a priority for governments at the expense of other
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such
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as education and infrastructure.
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I understand that maintaining
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functioning
health
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system
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is vital for the growth and thriving of a region, I completely disagree that other
areas
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should be underinvested. It is undeniable that the
health
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department should be one of the
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high priorities as it affects every single individual living in that particular area.
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, the majority of the population usually cannot afford
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private
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insurance. If a
government
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succeed in keeping the
health
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system
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working in an efficient and
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way, it is likely that most of its citizens would be rapidly treated and more people would be willing to move out to that place meaning
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of
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tax revenue.
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, there are other
areas
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that are equally important and directly impact
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the population`s
health
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and
wellbeing
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well-being
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. When considering the
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and
wellbeing
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of a person, it is important to consider factors
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as pollution and education. If the
government
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does not take care of the region`s infrastructure, issues
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as air pollution can negatively impact
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the hospitals` capacity as more people would present respiratory illnesses. Another crucial area for investment is education, as research shows that
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educated population is more likely to develop sustainable
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health
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habits,
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reducing the strain on the
health
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sector. The administration of a city, state or country requires a high level of administration skills but
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understanding
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the
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location and its needs in order to prioritise investments and efforts.
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, even though investment in the healthcare
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is crucial for the population`s well-being, I believe that it should not happen at the expense of other sectors. Governments
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to be able to understand the priorities and invest
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal healthcare
  • preventive medicine
  • public health infrastructure
  • social determinants of health
  • fiscal allocation
  • government expenditure
  • gross domestic product (GDP)
  • life expectancy
  • pandemic preparedness
  • health equity
  • social safety net
  • holistic approach
  • non-communicable diseases
  • cross-sector collaboration
  • socioeconomic status
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