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The two maps illustrate the external and internal changes in the design of a health centre that happened from 2005 until the present day

The two maps illustrate the external and internal changes in the design of a health centre that happened from 2005 until the present day
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The supplied illustration of two maps sketches out outdoor and indoor alterations of a medical centre that has happened since 2005 until nowadays.
Overall
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, it is obvious that only
physiotherapy
Correct article usage
the physiotherapy
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 room has remained untouched and keeps
it's
Correct your spelling
its
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origin
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original
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 placement,
while
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other
Correct article usage
the other
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 major side of the building has accomplished considerable changes. It is conspicuous, that the entrance to the complex has
changes
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changed
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it's
Correct your spelling
its
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position
Add an article
the position
a position
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 from the south to the west,
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moreover
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,moreover
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 the reception desk is now right by the front door and in front of the reception there is seen a new feature
such
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 as
children's
Correct article usage
a children's
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 play area. It could be plainly viewed that right down the hallway there is
large
Correct article usage
a large
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 space for seats and doors where patients get to their designated cabinets. It is clearly seen that
comparatively
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compared
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 to
the
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apply
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2005 there have been designed 2 rooms and minor operations
room
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rooms
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 on the
north-west
Correct your spelling
northwest
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 of the construction.
Furthermore
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, the car parking increased in size and now accommodates 30 cars in it,
while
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 in the past the
amount
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number
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 of spaces was only 12.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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