Social media addiction: Many people believe that social networking sites such as Facebook have a negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the era of globalization and modern
technologies
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and children are becoming addicted to social networks. Many individuals believe that social
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such
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as Facebook have
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effect
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on
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's lives, and I partially agree with
this
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statement. The objective of
this
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essay is to examine
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and drawbacks of the Internet in
the
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apply

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society. On the one
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social networks
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lives
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the better and
convenient
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side.
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with the help of the
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citizens can easily get access to everything. As an example of
this
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,
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can contact their relatives and friends with whom they have lost connection, nowadays technology has improved so much that we can find anyone on the web only knowing their name and surname. In consequence, inhabitants find their old acquaintances anew and do not cut off contact with
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they cannot meet in life.
On the other
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hand
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have become
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to live in social
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. In other quarters,
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of social media users almost do not live in their real life, they do not meet up with their friends and family.
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, for fascinated
users
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it is more important to search the net and easier to text a message rather than going outside.
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,
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become
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to their
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and
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an abnormal number of
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caused by gadgets.
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, all
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points social networks provide
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with big problems with health and communication with society in real life. As far as I am concerned, if
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had not been that addicted to their phones, the problem would be easily solved.

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