Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions, like nurses, doctors, and teachers. Some people think it is fully justified, while others believe it is unfair. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Professional

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athletes earn a lot of money during their prime compared to other professionals

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as teachers, doctors, nurses, and lawyers.

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phenomenon has been ongoing for decades, and many people asking whether their salary is fair enough in our society.

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with,

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is all about business, and athletes are contracted for certain periods which are recorded as intangible assets in their financial statements to generate

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because of their actions in the field, supporters come from around the world to watch their performance.

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sports

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clubs

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sell their broadcasting rights to television stations to produce income. Money collected from selling tickets and broadcasting rights is their main

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to finance their expenditure, including the player’s salary.

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of season 2021/22, AC Milan’s

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from these segments amounts to $300 million dollars, and 70% of their expenses were spent on the salaries of their players. In the professional field, no private companies have the willingness to pay millions of dollars to pay wages just for one employee per year because their main objective is to maximize the owner’s wealth, and

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condition has led to a corporation stipulating their ceiling salaries.

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, there is no teacher in

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world who obtain millions of euro for their dedication because of the limited budget in

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and expenditure for each country. In conclusion, I contend that high earnings for professional athletes are fair enough because they are working for

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clubs with high

revenue

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to entertain the public, meanwhile other professional does not earn high salaries because of the limited budget of their employer.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

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Grammatical Range: 9.0

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Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions, like nurses, doctors, and teachers. Some people think it is fully justified, while others believe it is unfair. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problem as a result of eating to much fast food. It is neccesary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree

Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

The illustrations show how chocolate is produced. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.