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Some people think that in the modern world we have become more dependent on each other, while others think that people are now more independent. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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The swiftly evolving modern society has been deeply changing the
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people
. Especially after we
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 into the era of the internet , everything that had been considered a complex task can be easily finished without too much effort. Some
people
thus
 claim that we are associated more and more tightly. These statements are not groundless. Under the onslaught of the trend of globalization and the growth of
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technology, the boundary between everyone is becoming more and more opaque.
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, the efficiency of communication has been significantly improved, which means the interconnection between all the
people
 is becoming more and more strong. Take social media as an example, we can now make friends with
people
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social media with a tap of the Screen, with whom won't have any connection with you in the previous decades Opponents of
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also
 have their reasons. Our quality of life is being paid as a price for the speed of the development of modern society.
Therefore
,
people
 seldom have time to socialise with others under onerous working burdens. Someone even
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 know their neighbours'
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, which means they can only recourse to themselves when they are facing
some
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unexpected situations.
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more and more nuclear families in the cities eighter, which make it hard for them to maintain the relationship with their relatives. Both sides have their own reasons,
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 I think they are all compelling.
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 society provided easy access
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communication
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 each other, but the physical distance did become harder and harder to transcend.
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