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The crime rate nowadays is decreasing compared to the past due to advances in technology. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Every day our life becomes is more unusual and more difficult, it may caused with changes in society, with the construction of a new philosophy: metamodern. Our enviroment always represets us and it because why we must notice philosophy influence on everyday and must change the point of view on certain things, even on our aims and posibility their achieves.
Luck
, of course, support people in good shape,
therefore
 we need sweet between beats, but what about aims? Will
luck
 help us develop it? On the one hand, all good we can naming '
luck
', but nothing will not change after it. Only work, only spending a lot of time on self-develope can help achieve the point, not
luck
.
On the other hand
,
luck
 is faith, and some people really does not belive, that rationality in their lives exist. It is not bad, it is shall not be something condemnatory in society, because new reality is freedom for each, even for belive, that you have done nothing to achieve your goals, that you just lucky. Maybe believers in God`s help really feel better, maybe it helps them not going mad, that fabulous. In my opinion,
luck
 is a small part of what you really do, that achive own aims. You can hope on heaven and be a fatalist, but if your deal is sit on the place and do nothing, you must know, that there is no god who will save you from parasitism. Metamodern is because there is no middle ground between good and evil: you achieve goals or you don't do anything.
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