The graph below shows the Qatari and Omani import totals (in tonnes) for several types of vegetables.

The graph below shows the Qatari and Omani import totals (in tonnes) for several types of vegetables.
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The pie chart given illustrates the vegetables
import
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, in
tonnes
,
of
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Qatar
and
Oman
in 1990.
Overall
,
Oman
's imported a larger number of greens than that of
Qatar
, which was around the thousand
tonnes
difference.
Firstly
,
Qatar
's most ordered vegetables were Spinach, Garlic, and Ginger respectively, with the amount of 450, 340, and 300
tonnes
accordingly
. Compared to
the
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Oman
's
statistic
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,
this
nation imported Garlic the most, followed by Spinach and Peas consecutively. Surprisingly,
Oman
's garlic order was 800 tinnes, which was almost two times larger than
Qatar
's most imported greens species.
On the contrary
, the least imported greens in
Oman
, including Ginger and Broccoli for 300 each, were still larger in amount than
Qatar
's
least
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order regarding 150
tonnes
of Peas. In conclusion, the proportion shown in
this
data is quite obvious that
Qatar
's whole import, in
tonnes
, was less than Omen vegetable imports;
this
can be easily observed by both countries' equal number of ginger imports: 300
tonnes
.
However
, the area of
pie
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chart occupied in
Qatar
is wider than that of
Oman
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tonnes, qatar, oman with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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