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Healthcare is a universal right and should be guaranteed by the government. To what extent you agree or disagree with the given statement?

#healthcare #right #government
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Over recent years,
people
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 have benefited from medical care, and arguments have persisted as to whether the
government
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 is obligated to cover citizens' healthcare costs or not.
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 there are convincing arguments on both sides, I strongly believe that it should be free.
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, one argument in favour of placing the burden of healthcare costs on individuals is the sheer number of patients, which makes it difficult for the
government
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 to afford to cover all expensesIn particular, it is worth mentioning that the number of elderly
people
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 continues to increase every year, and most of them cannot avoid relying on going to the hospital.
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, when it comes to an ageing society, the
government
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 would have to spend a large part of its budget on health
support
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.
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, there are several arguments in favour of providing free medical
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 for all.
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and
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 is
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 to the earlier opinion, it is
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 true that assistance to them is essential considering that elderly individuals are often dependent on medical assistance.
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 is because they have retired from their jobs and may not have sufficient income to
support
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 themselves, making
government
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 compensation necessary for their livelihood.
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, it is expensive for poor
people
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 to go to the hospital. We have seen with capitalism that the rich get richer and the poor get poorer, so the
government
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 can impose taxes on wealthy
people
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 and give healthcare
support
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 to
people
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 in poverty. In conclusion, some believe that the increasing number of elderly
people
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 makes it a financial burden for the
government
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 to provide health care coverage, but the
government
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 should pay for health care to help these elderly and economically vulnerable
people
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.
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