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Band 6.5

You have decided to leave your current employment. Write a letter to your employer. Include the following in your letter: – Explain why you are writing – Explain why you have decided to leave the company – Tell your employer what you plan to do after leaving your present employment

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Dear sir, I hope
this
 letter finds you well. I am writing
this
 letter to let you know that I have decided to leave my current job. I have been working with
this
 company for the
last
 five years and I have learnt a lot under your guidance.
However
, I am leaving
this
 country and decided to settle in Canada.
Beside
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, a few family reasons, one of the main
is
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,
I
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that I
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was looking to upgrade my studies and I was trying to get
an
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apply
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admission
in
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 a business course, which will give me an opportunity to grow in future. Before, leaving
this
 country I will join a
French Speaking
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French-speaking
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 course, because, by knowing
this
 language I can easily get
an
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apply
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employment that would help me to survive in Canada.
Moreover
, I would request you to write a reference letter for me. I hope you will understand my circumstances and accept my resignation. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Jatinder.
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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph covers a single main idea and transitions smoothly to the next.
Task Achievement
Be careful with overused expressions and repetition for a more polished writing style.
Task Achievement
The letter appropriately explains the reasons for leaving the job and future plans.
Coherence and Cohesion
The structure of the letter clearly follows the requirements of a formal letter, with an introduction, body, and closing.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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