Some people say that the purpose of education is to prepare individuals to be useful to society. Others say its purpose is to prepare individuals to achieve personal ambitions. Discuss these views and give your opinion.

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Some say that the aim of
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is to prepare
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to be helpful to
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. Others say its objective is to prepare
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to accomplish personal aspirations. In my opinion, the purpose of
education
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is to prepare
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to become beneficial to
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, some think the goal of
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to accomplish personal ambitions. They believe
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education
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should help graduates to achieve personal and professional ambitions.
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should focus to teach
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valuable skills
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communication,
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skills can help
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to find
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as well as
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deal with
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situation
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life.
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, I would like to agree with those
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who believe the purpose of
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education
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to be advantageous to
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with, the
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education
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about extremely crucial subjects, medicine, engineering,
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and technology
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, which means
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improtant
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important
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society
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, when the Covid-19 pandemic started
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doctors and nurses provide a lot of
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to protect us from
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this
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virus.
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, the
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purpose
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education
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system should focus
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to meet the needs of
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in order to make our
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healthy .
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, the aim
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education
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should become to educate the
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about ethical values and teach
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about
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right and wrong behaviour in order
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people
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good citizens.
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, the rate of crime in our community will minimize .
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, In my perspective, the purpose of
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should prepare is to prepare
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to be useful to
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society
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professional
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in specific fields to
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serve
society
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, educate
people
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moral values to make our
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without violence.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • preparation
  • beneficial
  • society
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • civic responsibility
  • active participation
  • social initiatives
  • societal issues
  • solutions
  • specialized professions
  • personal growth
  • self-fulfillment
  • passions
  • interests
  • potential
  • talents
  • job prospects
  • financial stability
  • balance
  • meaningful
  • foundation
  • emphasis
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