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(17/01/2015) Some people think that there should be some strict controls about noise. Others think that they could just make as much noise as they want. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #controls #noise
Nowadays,
noise
 pollution has become a common problem in our modern society. There is an opinion that
noises
 should be strictly controlled.
While
 others think that
people
 have the right to make
noise
 as much as they want. I will analyze both sides and give my thought on them. On
one
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 hand, everyone has every right to make
noises
 if they want. It’s a basic thing in
life
, everything required
produce
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noises
, from communicating with each other to
laboring
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labouring
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.
People
 produce
noises
 to express their needs or their desires, but that does not mean they can disturb
other
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others
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’ peace and personal space. There are enjoyable
noises
 and there are unbearable
one
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ones
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, based on each individual’s preference, so it’s advisable to produce
noise
 in
discipline
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.
On the other hand
, the government should
control
 the unpleasant
noises
.
Firstly
, too much
noises
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noise
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 can affect the well-being of
people
, they can badly influence the residents’ hearing ability and mental health. In that case, the
noises
 that cause health
problem
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problems
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on
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for
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 the human being should
strictly
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be strictly
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 banned.
Secondly
, as I have mentioned, there are
people
find
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who find
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noises
 unbearable,
such
 as the
noise
 from construction
area
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areas
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 or loud
market places
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marketplaces
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. With
such
noises
, the authority has the power to
control
 them and return
the
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apply
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peace to the
neighborhood
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neighbourhood
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. Yet,
noises
 should not be strictly
ban
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 because
noises
 are inevitable,
the
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 government can’t have absolute
control
on
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over
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 them. They can create laws to prevent the
noises
 to go overboard and disturb other residents’
life
 and health. In conclusion,
noises
 are
the
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an
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 indispensable part
in
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of
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 modern
life
 where many activities that make
noise
such
 as constructing
building
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buildings
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 are rising. That does not mean we can’t stop the
noises
to
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from
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 badly
affect
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affecting
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 our
life
, the government can
control
 them to help citizens have a healthy, peaceful and productive
life
.
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