In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

In several countries,
people
prefer to buy a house rather than renting it. There are different reasons for
this
case
which
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one of
them
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is investing,
other
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one is the desire
of
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better
life
standards and I believe
this
is a positive
situation
. One of the reasons why
people
think owning a
home
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as
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investing
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is
the
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because the
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price of the accommodations is flexible and they can make
profit
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a profit
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in the future from selling it. The amount of population increasing so rapidly in the world and it causes a rise in the demand for
homes
.
However
,
this
effects
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the value of the accommodations which creates an opportunity for owners to sell their
homes
for a great deal of
money
.
For example
, during
coronavirus
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the coronavirus
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pandemic the prices of
homes
rose and some
people
sold their
homes
to buy from much cheaper locations to generate profit from
this
situation
. Another reason why I believe
this
is a positive
situation
is the wish of
people
to have
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better
life
. Owning a
home
allows to
people
to live their lives without paying any rent. Generally, they think, they can use the
money
which they have to pay rent for improving their quality of
life
.
However
, they have to spend a huge amount of
money
to
buying
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a
home
once in their
life
. Owning an accommodation not only helps them to be more economically free
,
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but
also
enables them to live less stressful lives.
For example
, they can use the
money
which they had to pay
their
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if they do not own a house
to
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their education, daily
life
or for their holidays. In conclusion,
people
should buy themselves a
home
rather than renting it for given reasons and
this
situation
have to
considered
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be considered
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as a positive development.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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