These days young children spend a lot of time using computers, tablet and smartphones. Some people think that introducing children to technology at a young age is beneficial. Others believe that they would benefit more from traditional games. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge and experience.

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it would indeed be a hard task to isolate a country which is unaffected by the phenomenon of

technology

People

would not find it shocking, if

this

trend were to heighten in the coming years,Considering the current trajectory of the modern world . Increasingly laid out for all to see and fast becoming a fixture of many discussions is an issue that pertains to the

technology

benefits

as well as

traditional

games

This

essay shall analyse the issue from all angles and argue that

technology

effects

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affects

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children .

Firstly

, we are using more devices in our day-to-day life because

technology

has

been

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apply

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drastically increased in

this

era. We have more educational platforms on websites if children use

technology

in an appropriate way

consequently

they might gain more knowledge and they become smarter.Take Britain

for example

, where a poll

was

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published on BBC's website stated that the overwhelming majority of present-day researchers had decided to give more awareness to youngsters

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through

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the usage of

technology

On the other hand

,playing traditional

games

also

has more advantages it makes

people

more engaged with others

while

they are playing traditional

games

and

moreover

friendly

people

can make a strong society.In Germany in 2007 over a two-year period, Which polled over ninety thousand

people

, Showed that opinions varied considerably.A vast majority supported the above-mentioned viewpoint and

itconsidered

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considered

it considered

. it as paramount. In conclusion,

technology

and traditional

games

both have pros and cons in my perspective pupils should use electronic devices in

a limited ways

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a limited way

limited ways

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Lexical resource: 5.0

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Differences between countries become less evident each year. Nowadays all over the world, people share the same fashions, advertising, brands, eating habits, TV channels. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

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