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We cannot help everyone in the world that needs help, so we should only be concerned with our own communities and countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#world #communities #countries
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It is argued that helping humans who necessary assistance is really difficult in the
world
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 some
people
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 accept that we can just be concerned about the issues in our societies. I personally believe that the
communities
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 in each nation with a combination of social
media
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 have a key role in tackling the issues. On the one hand, no one can ever deny the significance of helping
people
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 who need attention in
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 century. In fact, the lobby of the group thinks that most of the countries cannot solve their problems. To put it more simply they have no effective tools to assist those persons.
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,
according to
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 the latest figures released by governmental
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authorities
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 the number of social
media
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 which they are trying to help other
people
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 in the
world
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 is sharply increasing.
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, NGO channels and many varieties of social
media
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 on cyberspace like Facebook, Instagram and so on and so forth.
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, it can be said that a minority of
people
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 accept that tackling the issue is not an important concern for government
authorities
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 it has many main drawbacks for our society.
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, it is widely accepted that we are living on the cutting edge of technology which contributes to many achievements in our
communities
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.
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, online communication and
media
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, thanks to the development of cyberspace the awareness of humans is increasing nowadays.
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, in terms of general knowledge about
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 disasters and the limitation in some places, other
people
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 in the
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 can observe them in the
media
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, the government
authorities
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 should legislate more money to help NGOs and charity centres to show the significant concern of
people
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 in the
world
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As a result
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, it is fair to say that
communities
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 have an important role in the awareness of humans in the
world
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. In conclusion,
communities
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 and NGOs should be planned and organised by governments to help and show the concerns of other nations. In the meanwhile, I personally believe that the combination of appropriate policies with the power of government
authorities
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 leads to tackling the concerns.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global interconnectivity
  • international cooperation
  • ethics
  • moral obligation
  • geographical borders
  • diplomatic relations
  • economic stability
  • global security
  • resource allocation
  • expertise
  • international aid
  • dependency and development
  • sustainable solutions
  • local and global initiatives
  • community resilience
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