The table shows the number of people (millions) that remain undernourished around the world from 2000 to 2009. The chart displays the global price of two food grains over the same period. Summarise the data by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows the number of people (millions) that remain undernourished around the world from 2000 to 2009.  The chart displays the global price of two food grains over the same period.

Summarise the data by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The given table and line graph illustrate the number of
people
with insufficient
amount
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amounts
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of food worldwide
form
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from
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2000 to 2009 and
value
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the value
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of grains in terms of
dollars
per
ton
throughout the same
period
respectively.
Overall
, an increasing trend was experienced during the
period
in quantity of undernourished
people
. Peak price was reached by the end of the
period
,
whereas
the opposite position was taken in the year 2000. The number of individuals suffering from hunger increased gradually.
Initially
,
quantity
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the quantity
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of undernourished
people
comprised
for
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857
million
. In 2 years, an increase of 5
million
people
occured
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occurred
.
Then
, by 2004, the amount starving members of society had grown to 873
million
. In 2006 and 2008 increases of 3
million
and 38
million
of
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people
made up a total of 924
millions
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million
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of
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malnourished
people
. During the final
year
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,year
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the number of
people
with insufficient amount of food skyrocketed to 1024
million
. The price of
rice
and
wheat
varied during the
period
. Both of these grains cost 200
dollars
oer
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per
ton
initially
.
While
the
value
of
rice
remained stable until 2004,
wheat
had
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experienced
grow
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growth
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of 200 and
decrease
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a decrease
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of 100
of
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dollars
. By 2006 both grains'
value
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values
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were equal to approximately 300
dollars
per
ton
.
Then
, the price of those products skyrocketed substantially.
Value
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The value
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of
rice
and
wheat
made up 800 and 700
dollars
per
ton
respectively. By the end of the
period
, the cost of
rice
per
ton
rose to about 1150
million
and
wheat
to 900
million
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "initially".
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, value, dollars, ton, period, million, rice, wheat with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "skyrocketed" was used 2 times.

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