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Band 8.5

You have a spare room in your Apartment that you would like to rent out to a student. Write a letter to your Student Accommodation Officer of local college and say 1. Where is your apartment located? 2. When will the room be available 3. What are the requirements for a student to stay?

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing regarding the advertisement for a rental space in my apartment. I have a two-bedroom flat and one is occupied by my friend and I.
whereas
, the other is ready to book. The location is quite prominent. It is situated opposite to Bramlea city centre in Brampton. A tenant can find every amenity near the house
such
 as grocery stores, malls and banks. The room is booked at the moment. It will be ready to use from the 15th of September. Newcomers can join the place on either the mentioned date or from the 1st of October.
Moreover
, there are some mandatory requirements for the tenant.
First,
of all, a rental agreement should have been signed by him. There is a lease for at least six months.
Secondly
, the individual should be neat and clean and quiet in nature. Rent will be collected from the first week of the month. I hope you will contact us as soon as you get new rental applicants. Yours sincerely. Harpreet Kaur.
Submitted by harpreet291kaur on

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coherence cohesion
The letter is generally well-organized, but it could be improved by grouping related information together. For example, all details about the availability and lease terms could be in one paragraph.
task achievement
Some minor grammatical errors need attention, such as 'whereas' at the end of the first sentence, and 'opposite to' should be 'opposite'.
task achievement
The letter clearly addresses all the prompts: the location, availability date, and requirements.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is appropriate and suits the formal context.
coherence cohesion
The closing and greeting are polite and appropriately formal.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • apartment situated in
  • convenient location
  • public transportation
  • amenities
  • available from
  • occupancy
  • non-smoker
  • quiet hours
  • rental price
  • duration of stay
  • necessary documents
  • proximity to
  • college campus
  • prospective tenant
  • fully furnished
  • shared amenities
  • terms and conditions
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