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The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. #land #three #region

The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. #land #three #region
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this
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 pie chart depicts the information,
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 particular reasons which are, agricultural land is not effective enough
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 the table gives the details,
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 causes influenced three provinces of the universe in the 1990s.
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, as acts are contrasted, the biggest proportion is in extra animal grassland
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 North America and
Oceania
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 show the lowest degradation compared to
Europe
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. It is depicted in
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 pie chart, there are four categories of territorial land degradation. Among these, over-grazing illustrates the highest percentage, accounting for 35% , the following is in cutting trees, which is 30%. Others comprise a quarter of 28%.
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 7%. Over-cultivation includes 28%. In the table,
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 four sources influenced
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three regions variously.
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 deforestation,
Europe
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 reached
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 high peak with 9.8%.
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 total land degraded, North America and
Oceania
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 got less degraded than
Europe
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, accounting for 5%, 13%, and 23% respectively. Over-cultivation is in
Oceania
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 non-graded, but
Europe
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 showed the greatest degree with 7.7.
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, over-grazing results in
Oceania
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 were seen bigger degree than
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Europe
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in Europe
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 and North America and reported their number with 11.3, 5.5 and 1.5.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words oceania, europe with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "depicts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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