this diagram shows the brick manufactureing process
The diagram illustrates the way in which bricks are made for the building industry.
Overall
, there are seven stages in this
process, beginning with the digging up of clay
and culminating in delivery.
To begin
, the clay
is dug up from the ground with a larger digger from the ground. This
clay
is then
placed onto a metal grid used to break up the clay
into smaller pieces. A roller also
assists in this
stage.
Following
this
, water and sand are added to the clay
, and this
mixture is then
turned into bricks either by placing it in a mould or by using a wire cutter. Next,
these bricks are placed in an oven to dry for 2 days.
In the subsequent stage, they go through a cooling and heating process. They are heated in a kiln at moderate and high temperatures, followed by a cooling process for 3 days. Finally
, they are packed and delivered to their destinations.Submitted by Rosa on
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