In many countries, people are now living longer than ever before. Some people say an ageing population creates problems for governments. Other people think there are benefits if society has more elderly people. To what extent do the advantages of having an ageing population outweigh the disadvantages?

Today , lifespan is longer than ever before , which has resulted in a rise in the number of elderly. Some think that it's a problem for the government,
whereas
others believe that it has many benefits for society.
Although
it has pros and cons ,
this
essay will contend that, on ,balance the advantages of having an older population outweigh the negatives. The beginning voice, first issue is that since other people who said Bill to sustain themselves
along with
getting ill because of weak immune systems, responsibility for them turns to the government.
As a result
, money from the government's budget that could get to the science, and technology development goes to the care of seniors.
In addition
, if they are healthy, they would like to keep working,
consequently
illuminating the young generation from the race because young people are not as experienced as old ones. It makes it hard to get employed by the future generation. That being said, older people have plenty of things in regard to wisdom, skills and experience. Many of them as retired do voluntary work, which helps the environment. Despite
this
fact, they are part of the economy.
For instance
, compared to the past, they are more productive now
along with
who is better health care '
consequently
they work longer, helping the workforce, and over time and contribute to the money cycle by buying supplies as a consumer . ,
Moreover
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they can help parents by watching after a child
while
parents are working.
To conclude
, despite all the negatives of having more senior ,citizens it appears that it is better to have them
due to
their impact on society.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ageing population
  • benefits
  • disadvantages
  • advantages
  • experience
  • knowledge
  • contribution
  • economy
  • society
  • healthcare
  • youth employment
  • community
  • intergenerational support
  • volunteerism
  • mentorship
  • increased demand
  • pension costs
  • social welfare systems
  • workforce
  • productivity
  • intergenerational conflict
  • technological adaptability
  • dependency
  • effective
  • skill development
  • employment opportunities
  • intergenerational solidarity
  • communication
  • lifelong learning
  • technological literacy
  • age-friendly
  • social policies
  • infrastructure
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