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The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.

The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.
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The chart depicts information about the manufacturing of instant
noodles
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, there are eight steps included in the manufacturing of instant
noodles
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 it starting from the storage silo and culminating
at
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in
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 labelling and selling. It is a man-made process.
To begin
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 with, flour puts into the truck from a storage silo after that, it is sent to
mixer
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a mixer
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 machine where water and oil are mixed into flour. Nextly, dough sheets are made
by
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with
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 the aid of rollers. In the next step, it is transferred to the machine
here
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where
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 dough strips are ready. Moving
further
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, after making strips, these are converted into noodle discs and pour oil in it. Afterwards, it is cooked and spices are sprinkled on it.
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, the
noodles
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 are packed by labelling machine and
noodles
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 cups are sent to the market for sale.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words noodles with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • manufacturing process
  • mixing ingredients
  • dough preparation
  • sheeting
  • steaming
  • cutting techniques
  • dehydration
  • deep-frying
  • cooling system
  • packaging
  • quality control
  • production line
  • mass production
  • food preservation
  • convenience food
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